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The Wall

September 21, 2005

Text:

Windows’ refractions
parade across the wall . . .
chromosome pairs?

Photo taken 9/21/05 outside of MIT Building 11.

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7 comments

  1. OK this image/poem is just intriguing.

    I don’t know how much input/advice you like on your work so I say this in hopes that I don’t offend, but I think it would be even more effective if you didn’t tell the reader what caused the chromosome pairs. Say something about the “building” rather than explain the shapes – let them leave wondering who/what created these shapes, was it intentional (some sort of social protest against stem cell research or something) or a tribute to some scientific discovery someone at MIT made …

    I’m rambling, I just think the picture could be such a mysterious statement for/against/about so many things if left a bit more open to interpretation.

    Forgive me if this much commentary is unwelcome!


  2. Absolutely, I LOVE the commentary. Thank you so much for your thoughts and insight.

    I was really thinking about trying to comment on this as sort of being a window into the body; maybe a better last line would be “soul’s refraction”.

    Hmm… You’ve given me much to ponder!! Thanks for the comment…


  3. Daniel:

    very creative — definitely has a MIT flavor. awesome

    cheers,

    Shane


  4. wow – left and right brained poet you are!


  5. Here’s some graffiti for your wall:

    chromosomal runes
    dance across a wall that is
    finally alive

    Hope you don’t mind; I just couldn’t resist playing with this!


  6. I never mind! Always a pleasure! And thanks for riffing on the piece…


  7. Window’s refractions
    dance on the wall
    like chromosome couples
    at a stem cell ball.

    Hey Daniel, I couldn’t help myself…I had to make it rhyme! LOL

    Great shot and insight.



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